Woosh as the eagle named Matthew swooped out of the trees.He had fireball eyes with red sharp teeth like a sword. His big black wings beat as fast as wind. His sharp yellow and orange claws can make a big scratch. His beak was so sharp it would scratch you when you touch it.He has a big poison green tail.
By Matthew
12 comments:
i liked how you described the egle and what it looked like. And you need to work on putting similes
I like how you started your story saying the eagle swooped out of the trees. Make sure you finish some of your sentences off as you said his sharp yellow and orange claws but you didn't finish the sentence.
Miss Collins
Very good job Matthew i like the way you started your story excitingly and how it carries on through the story
Thomas
Good job Matthew! I like how you have described the eagle using adjectives. I also like how you have described his teeth like swords and his eyes like fireballs. I would like to see some action in your writing.
From Gracie
Great describing words Matthew I loved how well your painted a picture of the beast in my mind. I'd like to hear more about the setting in your next piece.
Harrison
Great describing words Matthew I loved how well your painted a picture of the beast in my mind. I'd like to hear more about the setting in your next piece.
Harrison
Great describing words Matthew I loved how well your painted a picture of the beast in my mind. I'd like to hear more about the setting in your next piece.
Harrison
Hey Matthew
i love how you described the chimera it really painted a picture in my mind especially the similie that you put in.next time could you describe the setting.
From Anaya
* i liked how you said as the egle named matthew swooped out of the tree
wish. to add more similes and describe the chartchers a bit more
from shelby
Hi its josh
I like how used strong verbs
I don't think you need any wishes.
From Josh.
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