3 2 1 Bungy
I got ready for the most exiting jump of my life.Then they said 3, 2, 1 bungy. I was flying throw the air with my eyes shut then suddenly I got wet.After that the boat came along.I came of the boat and said I want to do that again.
By Jenna
10 comments:
Well done Jenna great crazy 5! Maybe next time you could add some ajective and similies!
From Meg
Awesome crazy 5 jenna!! i give your writing a 9 out of 10 next time could you describe how it felt jumping off the bridge and through the air.
from anaya
great Jenna I loved how you said I flew through the air with my eyes shut
from Georgia
well done Jenna.I like how you said this is the most exciting jumping my life.
well done Jenna.I like how you said this is the most exciting jumping my life.
from ella
I thought it was awesome how you said you were "FLYING through the air" and later on in the story you said "then SUDDENLY i got wet" i think it would be better if you could add in some interesting adjectives and verbs.
Jared
well done Jenna.I like how you said this is the most exciting jumping my life. and need to add more agectives to make it more cool and makes it sound awesome
from shelby
hey Jenna
your writing really put apicture inmy mind when you said"my eyes were shut and suddenly hit the water"next time use similies.
From Anaya
to jenna you really put a picture in my mind when you said my eyes were shut great work from sophie
hi Jenna Emma here geart wirting I liked how you put in some addjetives
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